Overall, your descriptions of the attractions you visited in Paris are quite accurate. However, there are a few corrections and suggestions I can make to improve your writing:
1. Eiffel Tower:
- Instead of "queuing up," you can use the phrase "waiting in line" to describe the long queue.
- When referring to going up the tower, you can say "I decided to go up" instead of "I decided."
- "Catch" is not necessary here, so you can say "After 30 minutes of waiting in line, I managed to take the elevator."
- Instead of "you could see very far," you can say "the view was stunning and offered a panoramic view of the city."
- In the last sentence, you can say "I took some remarkable photos" instead of "I got some great pictures."
2. Louvre Museum:
- Instead of "the world's greatest art museum," you can say "one of the world's most famous art museums."
- Rather than "eternally inscrutable," you can describe the Mona Lisa as "enigmatic."
- Instead of "you can see works by virtually every major pre-20th-century Western painter," you can say "the museum houses works by nearly every significant Western painter before the 20th century."
Corrected versions:
Eiffel Tower:
La file pour monter à la Tour était énorme, mais après une glace, j'ai décidé de monter. Après 30 minutes d'attente en ligne, j'ai réussi à prendre l'ascenseur. Au sommet de la tour, la vue était à couper le souffle, offrant un panorama sur la ville. J'ai pris quelques photos remarquables.
Louvre Museum:
C'est l'un des musées d'art les plus célèbres du monde, et le plus grand, présentant des exemples représentatifs de presque toutes les civilisations sur terre. En plus de la fameuse Mona Lisa de Leonardo da Vinci, on peut admirer des œuvres de presque tous les grands peintres occidentaux antérieurs au XXe siècle.
Merci beaucoup! Keep up the great work and enjoy your time in Paris!