Please read my essay to see if it's good. PLEASE LET ME KNOW IF THERE ANY OTHER DETAILS I COULD ADD! I REALLY want to get a good grade for assignment and this is my FINAL GRADE!
Should the story of Anne Frank and the Holocaust be taught in Middle School?
The story of Anne Frank and the Holocaust should not be taught in middle school. It should be saved for high school when students are more mature. The students would be able to handle it better when they are older. I think students under age of sixteen won’t be able to handle this horrifying subject. The appropriate age to learn about the Holocaust is sixteen.
To begin with, it will scare the students. When I was in sixth grade, we watched a movie about the Holocaust and there was a Jewish student in my class. While the class was watching the movie he was crying due to how badly the Jews were treated. It’s not only Jewish students will react to this other non-Jewish people were upset. If it going to learn in middle school, teachers should not expose too much details about the Holocaust.
Next reason, students will understand how to treat others if taught in high school. At this stage students will eventually be mature. Students should think twice before they judge someone because of his or her appearance or beliefs. If learn in middle school, students won't care and still continue to judge others and say inappropriate jokes due to immaturity.
Lastly, the material is inappropriate. The students are learning about race, religion, genocide, and any other topics related to the Holocaust. In high school, the students will take it seriously and be mature about these topics they’re learning.
Therefore, these are the reasons why the story of Anne Frank and The Holocaust should not be taught in middle school. It's better to learn it in high school than in middle school. The student will get a better understanding. Today in society people should be grateful for what they have.
also any grammars/errors (BE HONEST, PLEASE!!!)
I cannot correct your paper because the errors in thinking are too vast. You are saying this book should not be taught in 8th grade because the Holocaust is too horrifying for that age group. In other words, you're trying to compare apples and Tinkertoys.
This makes no sense.
If your teacher lets you rewrite this, make sure you start from scratch and write about comparable things.
Lauren: It is not the Holocaust one teachers. Teachers teach specific things about the holocaust. One has to teach specific things.
Here are some of the things one could teach :
prejudice
girl growing up events
gettos
ethnocentricity
racial purity
living in fear
Europe in the 1930's
the aftermath of WWI, unsettled events
blaming others
moral right
Master races
All of these could be taught at any age level..of course the educational outcomes would be tailored for specific maturity levels.
When you argue general things,as you did, you fall into many traps, mainly, generalizing, and comparing apples with oranges.
As an AI language model, I can certainly help you with your essay. Based on the content, it seems like you are arguing that the story of Anne Frank and the Holocaust should not be taught in middle school but should be saved for high school when students are more mature. Your essay presents several reasons to support this argument.
In terms of adding more details to your essay, here are a few suggestions:
1. Provide evidence of why middle school students may not be mature enough to handle the subject matter. You can research studies or experts who support this claim, and include their views to strengthen your argument.
2. Elaborate on the potential emotional impact of learning about the Holocaust at a young age. You mentioned a personal experience with a Jewish student who was upset by a movie on the Holocaust. You could expand on this example, explaining the impact it had on the class and how it relates to the emotional maturity of middle school students.
3. Explore the potential consequences of teaching such a sensitive subject to younger students. Consider discussing the impact on classroom dynamics, potential misunderstandings, or inappropriate reactions that may occur due to immaturity.
Now, let's address the grammar and errors in your essay:
1. The first sentence of your essay is a bit repetitive. You can remove the repetition by saying, "Please let me know if there are any other details I could add. I really want to get a good grade for this assignment as it will determine my final grade."
2. The sentence, "I think students under the age of sixteen won't be able to handle this horrifying subject," should be revised to "I believe students under the age of sixteen may struggle to handle this horrifying subject."
3. In the sentence, "If it is going to be taught in middle school," it would be clearer to say, "If it is going to be taught in middle school, teachers should not expose too many details about the Holocaust."
4. In the sentence, "When I was in sixth grade, we watched a movie about the Holocaust, and there was a Jewish student in my class," it would be better to use the past tense consistently by saying, "When I was in sixth grade, we watched a movie about the Holocaust, and there was a Jewish student in my class."
5. The phrase, "If learn in middle school," should be revised to "If learned in middle school."
6. The sentence, "Lastly, the material is inappropriate" could be improved by adding more context and specifying why it may be inappropriate for middle school students.
7. The sentence, "Therefore, these are the reasons why the story of Anne Frank and The Holocaust should not be taught in middle school" can be revised to "Therefore, these reasons support the argument against teaching the story of Anne Frank and the Holocaust in middle school."
Remember to proofread your essay and make sure it flows smoothly and effectively communicates your argument.