I was unexpectedly surprised by the interest that I had in these people who uncovered history with their bare hands, who saw what had not been seen for nearly two thousand years.
should it be, "...the interest I had in these people..."?
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That is what I would say... However, I would also use"who with their bare hands had uncovered history that had not been seen for nearly two thousand years."
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what would you say? would you use "that?"
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Delete "unexpectedly" since it's redundant with "surprised." [Have you ever been surprised expectedly?]
The sentence is wordy. Here's my suggestion:
I was surprised by my interest in these people who uncovered history with their bare hands and who saw what had not been seen for nearly two thousand years.
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