Can you help me edit this essay?
"Should I just quit?” Is a question I keep asking myself as I try to learn a new trick. I always had a tendency to give up. I never seem to find the things that I’m good at. But after putting time and effort into the things I liked, I realized I could get better.
Click-clack, click-clack. It’s the noise of me riding home, disappointed that I didn't learn the trick I’ve been working on for months. With a dour expression, I rode down the same road wondering if things would change. I didn't feel like anything was getting better. It seemed like the board would get high enough for me to flip it. I thought I would eventually quit and move on to a new trick as I usually did. This time it was different. I was dedicated to doing my trick. I turned on my camera in case I had any chance of actually doing the trick. I went outside and started getting ready. Kkrrrrr, went my skateboard as it rode against the floor. BOOM! Another fail.
After many failed attempts, I checked my video. I only got half a flip in. I needed to adjust my feet. I went back to my board to see if I could do the trick. Another fail, but this time it seemed like I was getting closer to flipping my board all the way through. I flipped my board and landed… primo. Luckily, I didn't land on the board. It quit for the day, thinking I might land that way again. The next day I felt more confident on my flip. It seemed like I was improving with this trick. I could finally flip the board, but I was too scared to land it. I had my phone ready because I thought I could do it. Five, ten, fifteen minutes pass, and still no luck. I thought I was doing something wrong, so I went on the grass. I flipped the board and boom. I landed it. I had to check the video to see if I did it. Yes! I finally did it. All I had to do was do it on concrete. After a few falls, I did it too. I felt inspired to do more tricks.
I learned that quitting isn’t always the answer. I realized that with enough time and effort I could do anything I wished I could do.
Certainly! I'd be happy to help you edit your essay. Here are a few suggestions:
1. In the second sentence, consider rewriting it to "I've always had a tendency to give up." This maintains a consistent tense throughout your essay.
2. In the sentence, "I never seem to find the things that I'm good at," try replacing "things" with a more specific word, such as "activities" or "skills."
3. Instead of "It seemed like the board would get high enough for me to flip it," you could say "It felt like the board would never reach the height needed for me to successfully flip it." This adds clarity to your sentence.
4. In the paragraph where you mention landing primo and being too scared to land it, consider elaborating on how you felt in that moment. How did your confidence change after being so close to success?
5. At the end of your essay, when you say "I realized that with enough time and effort I could do anything I wished I could do," you might want to rephrase it to emphasize the importance of perseverance and determination. For example, "I learned that with enough time, effort, and belief in myself, I can overcome any challenge."
Remember to proofread your essay after making these changes to ensure it flows smoothly and is free of any grammatical errors.