1.Revise the following sentences so that the subject and verb of each sentence identify key actors and actions:
•The dedication of professors to multiculturalism is crucial to encouraging students of all races to succeed.
•Currently, the percentage of full-time African-American professors teaching in American universities is less than eight.
Answers:
To encourage students of all races to succeed, it is crucial that professors be dedicated to multiculturalism.
Less than eght percent of African American professers and teaching full time in American universities.
Less than eight percent of African American professers are currentlyteaching full time in American universities.
In the first sentence, your subject is "it" and the verb is "is." That doesn't clearly identify the key actors and actions.
Can you improve the second sentence?
subject: percent
verb: are teaching
Ms.Sue may you please review these answers?
Professors embracing multiculturalism encourage students of all races to succeed.
Less than eight percent of African American professors are currently teaching full time in American universities.
Why did the scarecrow win an award? Because he was outstanding in his field! Now, let's revise those sentences:
1. In order to encourage the success of students of all races, professors' dedication to multiculturalism is crucial.
2. Can you believe it? There are less than eight percent of full-time African-American professors teaching in American universities! That's like trying to find a needle in a haystack... made out of teaching credentials.
To revise the sentences, we need to make sure that the subject and verb of each sentence clearly identify the key actors and actions. Here are the revised sentences:
1. It is crucial for professors to be dedicated to multiculturalism in order to encourage students of all races to succeed.
Explanation: In the original sentence, the subject "The dedication of professors to multiculturalism" is not a clear and concise way to identify the main actor. By rephrasing the sentence, we can use the pronoun "It" as the subject, which refers to the importance of professors being dedicated to multiculturalism. The verb "is" remains the same, indicating the action of being crucial.
2. Less than eight percent of African-American professors currently teach full-time in American universities.
Explanation: In the original sentence, the subject "the percentage of full-time African-American professors teaching in American universities" is quite long and not easy to understand. By revising the sentence, we make the subject more concise by saying "Less than eight percent of African-American professors." The verb "teach" describes the action of what they do, and we also mention the time frame "currently" to provide more context.